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Post by Ahmed Sat Jul 10, 2010 2:48 pm

This poem is dedicated to all the happy people
All the happy people
Who have real nice lives
And have no idea what's it like to be broken.

I feel like I am walking in circles
I am in a nervous wreck
Minimum wage
Make sweat for a worthless check
I am full of venom and rage

My son wants to tell me jokes
But I'm too stressed to laugh
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Post by preid1220 Sat Jul 10, 2010 2:54 pm

and the author of this morbid work?
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Post by Justice Sat Jul 10, 2010 2:57 pm

Did you write this?
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Post by Ahmed Sat Jul 10, 2010 3:00 pm

Pretty much
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Post by Hassan Sat Jul 10, 2010 3:39 pm

ummm.Its a work in progress..right?
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Post by Ahmed Sat Jul 10, 2010 3:48 pm

Yes it is
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Post by Hassan Sat Jul 10, 2010 3:50 pm

ok..work on the message (theme) first
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Post by The Banker Sat Jul 10, 2010 4:25 pm

Rock Bottom by Eminem.... u just took out the swearing Rolling Eyes

This song is dedicated to all the happy people
All the happy people who have real nice lives
And who have no idea whats it like to be broke as ****

I feel like I'm walking a tight rope, without a circus net
I'm popping percocets, I'm a nervous wreck
I deserve respect; but I work a sweat for this worthless check
Bout to burst this tech, at somebody to reverse this debt
Minimum wage got my adrenaline caged
Full of venom and rage... etc

but the son part is original Razz
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Post by preid1220 Sat Jul 10, 2010 6:32 pm

Ahmed your poem lacks power and reality.
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Post by Ahmed Sat Jul 10, 2010 8:54 pm

No Cho. I changed 70% percent of it. Therefore it is no longer that song. Check on MLA guidleines because you accuse me of such criminal acts.

Preid it is solid. But I dare say that the fool always lacks understaning of greatness.
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Post by The Banker Sun Jul 11, 2010 9:53 am

i ain't accusing u of nought... just pointing stuff out Razz
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Post by Ahmed Sun Jul 11, 2010 10:03 am

Sorry that was Admin speaking Razz
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Post by preid1220 Sun Jul 11, 2010 10:12 am

Hermione wrote:No Cho. I changed 70% percent of it. Therefore it is no longer that song. Check on MLA guidleines because you accuse me of such criminal acts.

Preid it is solid. But I dare say that the fool always lacks understaning of greatness.

I may be young, but i am not an idiot. I posted what i truly felt since your the one always asking for criticism.
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Post by Ahmed Sun Jul 11, 2010 10:14 am

I didn't ask for anything and I didn't call you an idiot O.o
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