This poem is dedicated to all the happy people
All the happy people
Who have real nice lives
And have no idea what's it like to be broken.

I feel like I am walking in circles
I am in a nervous wreck
Minimum wage
Make sweat for a worthless check
I am full of venom and rage

My son wants to tell me jokes
But I'm too stressed to laugh

and the author of this morbid work?

Did you write this?

Pretty much

ummm.Its a work in progress..right?

Yes it is

ok..work on the message (theme) first

Rock Bottom by Eminem.... u just took out the swearing

Quote :

This song is dedicated to all the happy people
All the happy people who have real nice lives
And who have no idea whats it like to be broke as ****

I feel like I'm walking a tight rope, without a circus net
I'm popping percocets, I'm a nervous wreck
I deserve respect; but I work a sweat for this worthless check
Bout to burst this tech, at somebody to reverse this debt
Minimum wage got my adrenaline caged
Full of venom and rage... etc

but the son part is original

Ahmed your poem lacks power and reality.

No Cho. I changed 70% percent of it. Therefore it is no longer that song. Check on MLA guidleines because you accuse me of such criminal acts.

Preid it is solid. But I dare say that the fool always lacks understaning of greatness.

i ain't accusing u of nought... just pointing stuff out

Sorry that was Admin speaking

Hermione wrote:

No Cho. I changed 70% percent of it. Therefore it is no longer that song. Check on MLA guidleines because you accuse me of such criminal acts.

Preid it is solid. But I dare say that the fool always lacks understaning of greatness.

I may be young, but i am not an idiot. I posted what i truly felt since your the one always asking for criticism.

I didn't ask for anything and I didn't call you an idiot O.o