I was inspired by Den Denz to write my own story.
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Tom and his sister Kate walked near the beach while searching for sea shells.

"There is nothing to do at Uncle's house", said Tom.

Kate nodded, "But it's nice to see them though, this is the first time we actually get to see our uncle, aunt and cousins. Before that we only heard of them from our parents."

A dog was heard barking in the near distance.

"Let's go see why the dog is barking" said Tom.

"Get that dog away from us!!!!" shouted Tom cousin, Phil, who had climbed with his sister, Alice. Tom led the dog away, while Phil and Alice climbed down.

"What was that about?" asked Kate.

"It's a crazy dog, don't mind him...so what were you guys doing?"

Tom returned and said "Well we were doing nothing....hey look up there, it looks like an interesting hill, let's climb it!"

Phil held Tom's shoulder so he doesnt' move. "No don't go dear cousin, never go there. We heard there is some sort of ghost who took the den in that hill as a sanctuary." Phil said.

"Wow, really?" said Tom

"Yes, and now it's getting dark, let's go back home for dinner" said Alice.

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Is anyone interested...should I continue this story?

it sounded to fake but the lay out was good!

What do you mean by "fake"?

I dont know but i headache from reading it ... i think fake as in it was written like how most stories are written theres no life to it..add some interesting words to it! So continue on Sultan lets hear the rest!

Ok I'll try my best
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The next night, it was stormy...Tom and his sister and cousins walk alongside the beach. Accidentally, Phil steps on dead dog bones and he screams and Tom could swear that he looked as if he got a heart attack!

"It's just bones!" said Tom

"Yeah, the ghost probably killed him....dogs could tell if soemone is a ghost you know, they'll bark like crazy..." said Phil

"Tell us more about this ghost Phil", requested Kate.

"Well he only comes out of his den during the full moon and he looks for people to kill during that night...but he doesn't go far away from the sanct..." Phil said.

"...Look up there!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" said Tom pointing on top of the den.

Bright green light was shining from the den.

"DON'T GO!!!! THE GHOST IS AWAKENING! LET'S ESCAPE!!!!!!!!!" yelled Phil

The kids ran away to their house.

tad bit better! but hayy its just my opinion im sure everyone will like it because they have different opinions!

My story is twisted so make sure to read the whole thing
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After they all went home and they all went to sleep. Tom knocked on Kate's room to see if she was awake and she was. They both knew what they wanted to do: they had to go see what's inside the den!

They sneaked quietly out of the house and walked to see what's in the den. The light was so eye appealing. They agreed that they won't actually go in the den, they'll just see what's inside...

So they walked on and peered inside the den. The glow was coming deep from inside the cave. They walked in a bit and saw a man with a white filthy hair. The man was reaching out for Tom quickly. The two siblings screamed and ran away and jumped down from the cave to the sand underneath.

When they looked up they saw Phil and Alice looked down at them with sunken eyes. "Didn't we tell you not to go in there?" Phil asked.

"Yeah...." Tom started.

"It's ok we have a way to trap the ghost in there forever and rid the world of his evil" Phil asked

"Ok what's the plan?" Tom asked

Whats the plan ???..fifi re-asked

Phil explained: Well no ghost can escape from a sanctuary. However, the ghost can escape once a month during the full moon. So we want to stop that. So you two, Tom and Kate, will climb over the cave and push rock so that a rock slide will occur and the ghost will be stuck there forever!!

"That seems like it might work" said Tom happily.

So Tom and Kate were about to climb over the cave as planned and Phil and Alice watched them from underneath... but to their surprise the ghost came out and grabbed them two(Tom and Kate) and took them in the cave with him....

ohhh no....

The ghost leaves them by his desk.

"What are you go-go-going to do with us, ghost?" asked Tom

"Hahaha I'm not a ghost, your pals that are waiting for you down this cave are the ghosts. I am a distinct cousin of yours. I have been studying for years how when our family reached this part of America they died, but instead of their souls resting in peace, they would live and set chaos to everyone. So I have come from a far place to lay their souls to rest."

Tom looked skeptical to what the old man was telling him.

"Ill tell you what" Ill let you go but you must promise me to go check the far right side of the cemetery"

"O..k...we promise" said Tom

And Tom and Kate ran down the cave.

" What did the ghost do with you?" asked Phil shocked that they came out alive.

"He let us go" Tom flatly said..."I'm tired...let's go home"

"Ok" said Phil.

They went home. After everyone fell asleep Tom took his sister Kate and a flashlight and went to the cemetery. They go to the right corner of the cemetery as promised. They read these tombstones:

Phil Wagner |1753-1763 |
Alice Wagner | 1754-1764 |


But more surprisingly they found 2 more gravestones next to them that read "Tom Wagner" and "Kate Wagner" and they were freshly dug graves that were empty and waiting for bodies.

thats creepy!

I knew you would be back said the old man smiling, when Tom and Kate returned to him.
"Yeah we saw the graves and we guess you weren't lying ab-..." said Tom

"No time to waste said the old man. You know how you two were planning to trap me in this sanctuary? Well you need to do that to your ghost buddies"said the old man

"Ok, tommorow" said Tom as he left.
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"Come on Phil and Alice, all you need to do is help throw rocks with us so we could close the cave once and for all" said Tom
"I don't think it's a good id..." said Alice
"Ohh stop complaining and lets' go" said Tom as he dragged Phil and Alice up the hill

Suddenly the old man appeared and took Phil and Alice not the sanctuary.

"I have got you now! Tom and Kate to prove to you that these are ghosts take a look at this." said the old man

The old man whistled to his dog.

The German shepherd came running and once he saw Phil and Alice he barked liked crazy.

The old man then took a candle and shined it over Alice and Phil's faces. Their faces and bodies started melting their skins off them and they became bones saying "We want to be your freinds Tom and Kate...FOREVER"

The old man yelled to the 2 kids to run since now that the sanctuary has 2 ghosts it will collapse and be locked in forever.

Tom and Kate ran alongside the dog, watching as a rockslide blocked all traces of the cave that held the old man and the 2 ghosts.

When Tom and Kate went hom to thier grandpa and grandma they told them "GRANDPA AND GRANDMA WE HAVE THE WEIREST STORY TO TEL...!!!!!!!" yelled both Tom and Kate

But the dog that had followed them started barking like crazy. Then the grandpa said, "Oh well, I guess the dog blew our cover...what should we do with these kids now" as he locked the door.

THE END

thats a strange family!

Did you like the story in general ?

Yes! But it started boring..

OMG that story gave me the creeps man...

Read the whole thing Mawa? I'll take that as a compliment

Yeah fifi, but I improved, right?

Sultan Ahmed IV wrote:Read the whole thing Mawa? I'll take that as a compliment

Yeah fifi, but I improved, right?

yeah i read it all..
walay i'm blamin u if i get nightmares.

Stop being a baby Marwa, it wasn't even that scary lol...girls being scared at anything

LOL it isnt even scary Marwa! and yes Ahmed it improved!

Want me to write another story?

Or...you can continue this one!

This one is done actually

its scary. nuff said.
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ima gonna go zzzzzz in a tick
night