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Dark Flame99966 NH Member
Number of posts : 6018 Username Change Points : 8587 Reputation : 64 Registration date : 2007-10-15 Country :
| Subject: The Final Hour Sat Nov 24, 2007 8:11 pm | |
| The little town of Rocksville was a lonely place with only 6 people and 1 class to learn in. English. These six people were Jack, Daniel, Ben, Katie, Ashley, and Stephanie. Stephanie was the teacher in Rocksville and one of two adults. The other adult was Jack. Jack was a rigged, black haired, white man with many scars from World War 1. Jack had mastered 10 different forms of martial arts.
One day, 16 Nazi soldiers came to the town in search of Jews. Although Jack the rest of the inhabitants of Rocksville were nnot Jewish, they did not believe in Christ and further were sent to an execution camp.
I'll be adding to this as soon as possible. | |
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preid1220 NH Moderator
Number of posts : 10749 Username Change Points : 12013 Reputation : 44 Registration date : 2007-11-06 Mood : Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sat Dec 15, 2007 12:11 am | |
| it's interesting but unbeleavabule. | |
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Dark Flame99966 NH Member
Number of posts : 6018 Username Change Points : 8587 Reputation : 64 Registration date : 2007-10-15 Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sat Dec 15, 2007 12:42 pm | |
| It's my first story. It is supposed to be a little bit of fiction and history even though I didn't mean for that when I started it. | |
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preid1220 NH Moderator
Number of posts : 10749 Username Change Points : 12013 Reputation : 44 Registration date : 2007-11-06 Mood : Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sat Dec 15, 2007 3:22 pm | |
| well for a first story it's ok but i see room for more detal also you cut the story off to soon. You may wanto to discrive the village a little more. | |
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Dark Flame99966 NH Member
Number of posts : 6018 Username Change Points : 8587 Reputation : 64 Registration date : 2007-10-15 Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sat Dec 15, 2007 4:11 pm | |
| I know. I was going to and I meant to but I just didn't | |
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preid1220 NH Moderator
Number of posts : 10749 Username Change Points : 12013 Reputation : 44 Registration date : 2007-11-06 Mood : Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sat Dec 15, 2007 4:34 pm | |
| well it's never good to put a story out there with only 1/3 finished | |
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Dark Flame99966 NH Member
Number of posts : 6018 Username Change Points : 8587 Reputation : 64 Registration date : 2007-10-15 Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sat Dec 15, 2007 6:24 pm | |
| I only started typing away. Never actually wrote this down and then thought what was going to happen next. | |
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preid1220 NH Moderator
Number of posts : 10749 Username Change Points : 12013 Reputation : 44 Registration date : 2007-11-06 Mood : Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sat Dec 15, 2007 6:45 pm | |
| well you need ot wright things like this down man | |
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Dark Flame99966 NH Member
Number of posts : 6018 Username Change Points : 8587 Reputation : 64 Registration date : 2007-10-15 Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sat Dec 15, 2007 7:11 pm | |
| When I start doing writing for fun(that means never). | |
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preid1220 NH Moderator
Number of posts : 10749 Username Change Points : 12013 Reputation : 44 Registration date : 2007-11-06 Mood : Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sat Dec 15, 2007 7:24 pm | |
| o come on wrighting can be a tun of fun! | |
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Dark Flame99966 NH Member
Number of posts : 6018 Username Change Points : 8587 Reputation : 64 Registration date : 2007-10-15 Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sat Dec 15, 2007 7:58 pm | |
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preid1220 NH Moderator
Number of posts : 10749 Username Change Points : 12013 Reputation : 44 Registration date : 2007-11-06 Mood : Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sat Dec 15, 2007 8:25 pm | |
| ... wow you have no idea! wrighting is grate! try it some time | |
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Dark Flame99966 NH Member
Number of posts : 6018 Username Change Points : 8587 Reputation : 64 Registration date : 2007-10-15 Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sun Dec 16, 2007 6:22 pm | |
| I would...for an assignment. P.S.Come one Preid! Start spelling correctly | |
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preid1220 NH Moderator
Number of posts : 10749 Username Change Points : 12013 Reputation : 44 Registration date : 2007-11-06 Mood : Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sun Dec 16, 2007 6:33 pm | |
| i'm sry i stink at gramer | |
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Dark Flame99966 NH Member
Number of posts : 6018 Username Change Points : 8587 Reputation : 64 Registration date : 2007-10-15 Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sun Dec 16, 2007 6:35 pm | |
| It's not grammar. It's the words | |
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preid1220 NH Moderator
Number of posts : 10749 Username Change Points : 12013 Reputation : 44 Registration date : 2007-11-06 Mood : Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sun Dec 16, 2007 6:38 pm | |
| well i'm bad at spelling | |
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Dark Flame99966 NH Member
Number of posts : 6018 Username Change Points : 8587 Reputation : 64 Registration date : 2007-10-15 Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sun Dec 16, 2007 6:39 pm | |
| Thought you said you got As in everything but italian | |
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preid1220 NH Moderator
Number of posts : 10749 Username Change Points : 12013 Reputation : 44 Registration date : 2007-11-06 Mood : Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sun Dec 16, 2007 6:40 pm | |
| i did, we didnt get graded on anything involveing speeling | |
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Dark Flame99966 NH Member
Number of posts : 6018 Username Change Points : 8587 Reputation : 64 Registration date : 2007-10-15 Country :
| Subject: Re: The Final Hour Sun Dec 16, 2007 6:41 pm | |
| Spelling... Lol, are you trying to annoy me or are you dyslexic? | |
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